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How to do creative tourism
A couple years ago, a creativity role becomes more popular in Thailand tourism industry. Actually, creativity is a part of developed tourism such as creating the place to be a tourist attraction, creating identical goods and services, creating packages to attract both domestic and international tourists. However, many people always think about creativity in the field of trader which helps to present their businesses more interesting. In fact, the tourists themselves are not less important than traders in helping to develop creative tourism.
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Creative Tourism
Creative tourism is a step on from cultural tourism. If cultural tourism could be defined as the experience of visiting somewhere to observe local art, music, handicrafts, cuisine and so forth, creative tourism is going further than just observing. A creative vacation will involve learning a skill or art from the country or region visited to get a hands-on experience. It could be cooking authentic Thai food, making umbrellas, caring for elephants, living on an organic farm, learning traditional Thai massage or a myriad of other activities. For me, a holiday is not just for relaxation, but it also can be an opportunity to gain a new vision of places we have never been to before. This way we can explore new lifestyles and different cultures. However, we should seek to understand the differences in cultures and respect and help maintain both community and normal traditions of those places as much as we can. We can travel creatively and do more than just observe.
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This research finding will elaborate the impact of gender inequality in the education and employment.
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This research will elaborate on the impact of gender inequality in education and employment.
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Since the world more become globalisation and the demand for efficiency is increased as a result, there would be a significant affect to employment
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Globalisation and the drive for efficiency have had a significant impact on employment.
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This study is assessing how the government interventions effect valuations of property market.
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This study assesses how government interventions affect valuations in a property market.
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“Questionnaire is a structure technique for data collection consisting of a series of question, written or verbal, that a respondent answer”.
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“Questionnaires are a structured technique for data collection consisting of a series of questions, written or verbal, that a respondent answers.”
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